Original Song : Fragile Dreams
It was filled with passion,
filled with desire.
No one heard your call,
so it burned with fire.
What was left was only
a dream of glass.
You buried it deep,
down deep in your past.
Forgotten was this,
fragile dream.
Where upon your heart,
it awoke to beam.
It was filled with passion,
filled with desire.
You heard its call and
it lit like a fire.
As delicate this
dream may be.
You know it’s a passion
you can see.
Once this dream is
taken with love.
It will shine like
the sun above.
Fear may take you
for a fool.
Dishearten spirit
with distraction.
Make it appear
as if it’s cool.
But dreams are not
born with inaction.
Fill you dream with passion,
fill it with the will to inspire.
We can hear your call,
strengthen it with your loves inner-fire…
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| Meteophor | Posted: 2010/3/21 20:19 Updated: 2010/3/21 20:19 |
  Joined: 2007/6/13 From: Mesopotamia Posts: 1413 |
 Re: Fragile DreamsKimberley and Bethany,
Thank you both for taking the time to comment. My poetry wants to offer something for everyone, as long as you can take something from it of use, then I feel I have accomplished my purpose of being a poet :¬) Amed. |
| k.kay_ricciardi | Posted: 2010/3/21 12:54 Updated: 2010/3/21 12:54 |
New and fancy free   Joined: 2010/2/19 From: Posts: 23 |
 Re: Fragile DreamsVery pretty,
"What was left was only a dream of glass. You buried it deep, down deep in your past." ^^ those lines meant a lot to me, kinda like your trying to forget a dream that you weren't able to realize... that's how I saw it anyway. -Kim |
| dancingbear9296 | Posted: 2010/3/19 11:12 Updated: 2010/3/19 11:12 |
 Joined: 2007/11/1 From: becoming a student of life Posts: 837 |
Re: Fragile Dreams I really love the rhymes you used. Very well written :)
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| Meteophor | Posted: 2010/3/13 19:16 Updated: 2010/3/13 19:16 |
Joined: 2007/6/13 From: Mesopotamia Posts: 1413 |
Re: Fragile Dreams Norma and Cassie,
thank you both for reading, it always brightens my day when I see people appreciating my work. Much love, Amed. |
| Sapphire__Eyes | Posted: 2010/3/11 12:53 Updated: 2010/3/11 12:53 |
Poetry is my existance   Joined: 2006/4/4 From: Just trying to get by, where ever that may be. Posts: 2195 |
Re: Fragile Dreams This is beautiful Amed, usually your poems are more dense but this was simple yet elegant. It was well portrayed and I applaud the emotion shining through.
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| BlackOrchid | Posted: 2010/3/11 10:31 Updated: 2010/3/11 10:31 |
Poetry is my existance  Joined: 2004/8/30 From: Tennessee Posts: 2050 |
Re: Fragile Dreams well it captured me
i loved it and it felt like a dream nice norma |
| Meteophor | Posted: 2010/3/10 8:51 Updated: 2010/3/10 8:51 |
Joined: 2007/6/13 From: Mesopotamia Posts: 1413 |
Re: Fragile Dreams Thank you SJ,
always appreciate the time you take to read. Much love, Amed. |
| SirichJ | Posted: 2010/3/10 7:35 Updated: 2010/3/10 7:35 |
Poetry is my existance  Joined: 2004/8/27 From: England, UK Posts: 2777 |
Re: Fragile Dreams Something different from you Amed, very pretty :)
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