*Misc : Nothing Rhymes with Purple
I’m sorry I can’t face you
I really wish I could.
If it wasn’t for the shivers that run up my spine I would speak more than a feeble “hello”
It’s nothing personal
I think of you, the way you were, when you were mine
When you brought me up on my worst days
When you uncovered the dirt that surrounded my face
and lent your hand for me to hold
You taught me things, I wouldn’t have learned on my own
I miss you dear, terribly so. It’s not my place to say
You have your journey, and our journey ended.
It’s nothing personal.
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| GoliathAssassin | Posted: 2010/5/15 20:30 Updated: 2010/5/15 20:30 |
Poetry is my existance   Joined: 2006/3/30 From: Detroit, Michigan. Left behind... Hickory and 8 mile for the suburban grind... Posts: 2200 |
 Re: Nothing Rhymes with PurpleActually, I thought the poem was great and my problem was the title. It's a clever title if the poem has to do with it. But a clever poem and a clever title don't automatically need to be thrown together... This poem is very heartfelt and sad, so I felt it took away when the title sounded like I was preparing to read something very witty and funny. I never know how critical to be with a new person, because I don't try to offend. Everything here was awesome quality, just mis-matched in my oppinion.
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| Brownie | Posted: 2010/3/17 20:03 Updated: 2010/3/17 20:03 |
New and fancy free   Joined: 2010/1/28 From: Posts: 30 |
Re: Nothing Rhymes with Purple Interesting that most of the time you didn't use any punctuation. Any reason in particular?
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| sweet_revenge | Posted: 2010/3/17 19:58 Updated: 2010/3/17 19:58 |
Just can't stay away   Joined: 2005/5/30 From: Wonderland Posts: 121 |
Re: Nothing Rhymes with Purple the title = awesome.
the poem = even better, I didn't know what to expect when I saw that title, but I almost felt myself pulled back to the feelings of past relationships just by reading this. Contrary to a previous comment, I loved the way this flowed. I think it all just depends on how each persons brain sees the poetry that determines how well it flows. |
| Lyra | Posted: 2010/3/11 10:56 Updated: 2010/3/11 10:56 |
New and fancy free Joined: 2010/2/22 From: Posts: 27 |
Re: Nothing Rhymes with Purple Raw.. But great. You can feel the emotions that you're trying to convey.. Good job with this.
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| Maerah~Rae | Posted: 2010/3/9 19:26 Updated: 2010/3/9 19:26 |
New and fancy free  Joined: 2010/3/2 From: In the farthest depths of my mind, please leave a message and I'll get back to you. Posts: 22 |
Re: Nothing Rhymes with Purple I really like this, the flow was kind of off to me, but it was really raw and sad. Great pen
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| BlackOrchid | Posted: 2010/3/9 13:27 Updated: 2010/3/9 13:27 |
Poetry is my existance  Joined: 2004/8/30 From: Tennessee Posts: 2050 |
Re: Nothing Rhymes with Purple feelings of melancholy
sadddddddd i loved every sad wor and feeling u portrayed excellent pen norma |