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| GoliathAssassin | Posted: 2008/11/17 11:58 Updated: 2008/11/17 11:58 |
Poetry is my existance   Joined: 2006/3/30 From: Detroit, Michigan. Left behind... Hickory and 8 mile for the suburban grind... Posts: 2200 |
 Re: KnowledgeYes. Very nice. And very short. It seems almost like a school assignment in a poetry unit of sorts.
It does seem that AJ sensed your craving to hear something positive. I do believe he has done the most he could with what he was given. A very positive comment for such a short poem. The whole progression is a bit sad... |
| AJ Strong | Posted: 2006/1/4 0:12 Updated: 2006/1/4 0:12 |
Poetry is my existance  Joined: 2005/2/7 From: Bloomington Indiana Posts: 2083 |
Re: Knowledge Ah see now here the hook....
Your first line, draws in Your last line, finishes it "An asset to life Knowledge" Very nice. Disclaimer: I offer nothing more than constructive criticism, if you wish not to receive it please PM me and I shall never offer it to you again. |